Into the Woods/Lost - Writing Workshop W7 T2 - Follow up

Hello, welcome to my blog. I had to do a story and I had to choose 1 topic out of 3 options. I chose into the woods. I chose it because it sounded like I could make a good story out of it, and I have. 

Here is my link to the story:
LINK TO STORY

Here is the actual story on blogger:

Into the Woods/Lost

by Hayun

Dark and windy. Leaves rustling, tall and scary. Trees waving, side to side. I can mostly hear the birds taking flight into the sky. The trunks and leaves, covering the light blue sky, the shining sun is barely bright, it feels like an empty room with no light, I hear animals slithering, walking and roaring. I can’t hear the lively songs of the birds in their nests. 

Lost, don’t even know what to do. It’s too dark, I can’t even see my hands! I know that I made the wrong decision.  ”                           ” It’s silent. Randomly turns silent. I scream loud, “AHHHHHHH” All I hear is my own echo. Thinking this is a dream, I tried to jump off a towering tree. But first, I need to create light. I bend my knees, and crawl like I don’t know how to walk. I try to find rocks and sticks to make a natural light source: fire.

I found four small stones and little twigs that were snapped from the trunks of the trees. I crouch down, lag my sticks in one pile, on the old, crispy leaves and start scraping my stone. Making barely anything, I grabbed the two other stones, scraping them strong and fast as I can, one last time, I shut my eyes, and scrape again and again, then I start to hear something crackling, I hear the pile of twigs hissing, I smell smoke, I made fire.

Now I can finally see. But I didn’t feel alone. **Hhhhsssss** hearing a creature going at the speed of light, leaves rustling, I can see footprints, four footprints, on the leaves, then I hear something tapping on my shoulder, I gulp, very loudly, beads of sweat were dripping down my for head, I slowly turn around, I see a creature, a very dark looking creature. It was hard to explain, but the only thing I was thinking about for now was, ‘RUN!!!!’ I quickly ran away from the fire, away from the light, away from the hideous animal and I kept on running.

Panting, exaggerated, I wanted to stop, but at the same time I wanted to be safe, it was a hard decision. I didn’t know where I was going, it was too dark. So I decided to have a quick stop. Then suddenly… **rustle rustle** I heard a dead bush, rustling, then a growl, the volume was increasing, the growl was death frightening, **grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR** I wanted to run, but my legs were too tired, so I roared, “WHAT DO YOU WANT?!” I shouted so loudly, I couldn’t even hear the growl anymore, the creature ran away, I thought I had some kind of superpower to shout so loudly an unknown creature would run off. 

Never know, I will never know, we will never know what the creature was, we will never know. Again, I heard its growl, so I growled back. It felt like I was turning into a wild unknown. Thinking about it made me worse. Suddenly, I saw a red light, a bright red light, shining at my face. I saw 6 eyes of the monster, it shut the four of them and started to roar again. I felt dead. I knew I was going to die. I don’t even know how I even got here in the now, I forgot everything. I didn’t know who I was. Suddenly, I started to grow, grow something from my back, I was coming out like wings. A giant spike on my back, a purple spike, I then had a 3x better eyesight. Then I found out, what if I am the monster. My roar was loud, so loud, louder than 1000 kids screaming and running around. I felt, actually, I didn’t even know what I felt like.

I had razor claws, able to cut through walls and trees, I felt powerful. Really powerful, stronger than superman or hulk. It wasn’t dark any more. It looked bright. The world was colourful, it was like, I was into the woods.

All written by me. 

Question: Do you like my story? Did you learn any new ways to write? If you had to rate my story 1 to 10. What would you give me?